Malik, this is a really good start for an elevator pitch. But, I think there are a couple small things that you could improve upon before presenting this idea further. First, your voice failed to have fluctuation, so it seemed like you weren’t as interested about such a good idea! Second, you and I had opposite experiences on this assignment. I know for a fact that I spoke to fast, and in my opinion, you could have spoken faster. I just think that there was more room that could have been filled with more engaging facts! That being said, I still want to say that it was a really good pitch.
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Malik, this is a really good start for an elevator pitch. But, I think there are a couple small things that you could improve upon before presenting this idea further. First, your voice failed to have fluctuation, so it seemed like you weren’t as interested about such a good idea! Second, you and I had opposite experiences on this assignment. I know for a fact that I spoke to fast, and in my opinion, you could have spoken faster. I just think that there was more room that could have been filled with more engaging facts! That being said, I still want to say that it was a really good pitch.
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